Roommates Revision based on critique

Revision based off the critique i got from professionals and from my classmates in senior studios.

Transcript

1. roommates Duration: 00 02 15 01 Date: July 09 2024
6. Dialog RUBY: Sighs
11. Dialog RUBY: This wont do.
16. Dialog SFX: echoing steps
18. Dialog CINDY: Groans
23. Dialog SFX: Key unlocking door
27. Dialog SFX: Door opens
29. Dialog RUBY: hey
32. Dialog RUBY: How did your
33. Dialog RUBY: day
34. Dialog RUBY: Go?
39. Dialog CINDY: It
40. Dialog CINDY: It
41. Dialog CINDY: was,
42. Dialog CINDY: It was fine
55. Dialog RUBY sfx: Takes a deep breath.
56. Dialog RUBY: so are we going to talk about it?
57. Dialog CINDY: Can we do this tomorrow,
58. Dialog CINDY: ive got this huge test tomorrow
59. Dialog CINDY: I gotta
60. Dialog CINDY: study
67. Dialog RUBY HUFFS
68. Dialog RUBY: you said that yesterday
69. Dialog RUBY: the day before.
70. Dialog RUBY: I waited all day to talk to you.
75. Dialog CINDY: I said
77. Dialog CINDY:I said I dont have
78. Dialog CINDY: Time
90. Dialog RUBY: I Dont want to see my friend wither away!
91. Dialog CINDY: What do you mean,
92. Dialog CINDY: im FINE.
93. Dialog RUBY: does this look fine?
97. Dialog RUBY: you told me
99. Dialog RUBY: to
100. Dialog RUBY: Look out for you
103. Dialog RUBY: to encourage you
106. Dialog RUBY: but its
107. Dialog RUBY: been
108. Dialog RUBY: 6 weeks
109. Dialog RUBY: Midterms,
110. Dialog RUBY: are over
112. Dialog RUBY: why cant you
113. Dialog RUBY: Just
114. Dialog RUBY: Stop
117. Dialog CINDY: Stop taking my problems personally.
120. Dialog RUBY: THEN STOP BEING A PROBLEM
121. Dialog RUBY: FOR
122. Dialog RUBY: ME!
128. Dialog RUBY: Gasps
131. Dialog RUBY: Cindy,
132. Dialog RUBY:: I