Snow In The Open Sea REDO

The mysterious snowstorm that blows in around the Tempus brings hidden tensions up to the surface, bringing out both the best and the worst of the crew.

Got really motivated by some notes I got on the original so I redrew the whole thing, I hope the comedy and action feels more active this time around.

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   Storm sets in around ship
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   Tar falls
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   Soot: Tar!
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   Soot: Are you ok?!
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   Tar: The samples are just fine!
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   Tar: This abnormal storm is very intersting-
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   Tars voice fades into bg rambking noise
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   Tar: Wakey!
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   Tar hits Soot with the cup of snow, shocked
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   Tar: Ooo! This requires further testing!
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   Tar picks up snowball
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   Tar: Ooo! This requires further testing!
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   They reel up, Soot/North react
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   Tar throws
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   North reveals snowball
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   North throws
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   Tar is hit
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   Tar throws
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   Snowball directed at Lena
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   Len: Ack!
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   hit, Lena fumbles her throw
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   North: COLD!
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   Snowball hits North
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   Soot slides in as camera pans out, Tar stumbling
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   Tar flings all their snowballs as they fall
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   skid
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   get up
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    others ready to strike
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    flee
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    Tar confused as the others look up in concern
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    reveal the Captain
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    descend
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    Soot grabs notebook
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    he hands it to Tar
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    camera blur zoom out
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    Curtain of snow covers frame
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