Camp Spooky - Revision Red Lines Sample 1

An example of redlines given to revisionist for clean up including acting notes, re-posing, and correcting eye direction.

See the finished short on YT here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JY-IazWYp9E

Transcript

1. Scene 009 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE A ghoooost! Action Notes
2. Scene 009 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE A ghoooost! Action Notes
3. Scene 009 Panel 3 Dialog Action Notes
4. Scene 009 Panel 4 Dialog Action Notes
5. Scene 009 Panel 5 Dialog Action Notes
6. Scene 010 Panel 1 Dialog Action Notes
7. Scene 010 Panel 2 Dialog Action Notes
8. Scene 010 Panel 3 Dialog Action Notes
9. Scene 010 Panel 4 Dialog Action Notes
10. Scene 010 Panel 5 Dialog Action Notes
11. Scene 010 Panel 6 Dialog DAISY Aaaand... Action Notes
12. Scene 010 Panel 7 Dialog DAISY Aaaand... Action Notes
13. Scene 012 Panel 1 Dialog DAISY Aaaand... Action Notes
14. Scene 012 Panel 2 Dialog DAISY This ghost.... Action Notes
15. Scene 012 Panel 3 Dialog DAISY This ghost.... Action Notes
16. Scene 012 Panel 4 Dialog DAISY This ghost.... Action Notes
17. Scene 012 Panel 5 Dialog DAISY This ghost.... Action Notes
18. Scene 012 Panel 6 Dialog DAISY This ghost.... Action Notes
19. Scene 013 Panel 1 Dialog DAISY loved candy...! Action Notes
20. Scene 013 Panel 2 Dialog DAISY loved candy...! Action Notes
21. Scene 013 Panel 3 Dialog DAISY loved candy...! Action Notes
22. Scene 013 Panel 4 Dialog DAISY loved candy...! Action Notes
23. Scene 013 Panel 5 Dialog DAISY loved candy...! Action Notes
24. Scene 014 Panel 1 Dialog DAISY but... Action Notes
25. Scene 014 Panel 2 Dialog DAISY but... Action Notes
26. Scene 014 Panel 3 Dialog DAISY One halloween...! Action Notes
27. Scene 014 Panel 4 Dialog DAISY Uhhm.... Action Notes
28. Scene 014 Panel 5 Dialog DAISY Uhhm.... Action Notes
29. Scene 014 Panel 6 Dialog DAISY Uhhm.... Action Notes
30. Scene 014 Panel 7 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
31. Scene 014 Panel 8 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
32. Scene 014 Panel 9 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
33. Scene 014 Panel 10 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
34. Scene 014 Panel 11 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
35. Scene 014 Panel 12 Dialog DAISY -Take it Minnie! Action Notes
36. Scene 015 Panel 1 Dialog Action Notes
37. Scene 015 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE One Halloween... Action Notes
38. Scene 015 Panel 3 Dialog MINNIE One Halloween... Action Notes
39. Scene 015 Panel 4 Dialog MINNIE One Halloween... Action Notes
40. Scene 015 Panel 5 Dialog MINNIE One Halloween... Action Notes
41. Scene 015 Panel 6 Dialog MINNIE One Halloween... Action Notes
42. Scene 015 Panel 7 Dialog MINNIE it... uhm.... Action Notes
43. Scene 016 Panel 1 Dialog Action Notes
44. Scene 016 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE It- Action Notes
45. Scene 016 Panel 3 Dialog MINNIE didn't get - Action Notes
46. Scene 016 Panel 4 Dialog MINNIE - any candy! Action Notes
47. Scene 016 Panel 5 Dialog MINNIE - any candy! Action Notes
48. Scene 016 Panel 6 Dialog MINNIE - any candy! Action Notes
49. Scene 017 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE Ohhhh....! Action Notes
50. Scene 017 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE Ohhhh....! Action Notes
51. Scene 017 Panel 3 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
52. Scene 017 Panel 4 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
53. Scene 017 Panel 5 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
54. Scene 017 Panel 6 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
55. Scene 017 Panel 7 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
56. Scene 017 Panel 8 Dialog MINNIE So it came to .... Action Notes
57. Scene 017 Panel 9 Dialog Action Notes
58. Scene 017 Panel 10 Dialog MINNIE .... steal everyone else's treats! Action Notes
59. Scene 017 Panel 11 Dialog MINNIE .... steal everyone else's treats! Action Notes
60. Scene 017 Panel 12 Dialog MINNIE .... steal everyone else's treats! Action Notes
61. Scene 017 Panel 13 Dialog MINNIE .... steal everyone else's treats! Action Notes
62. Scene 018 Panel 1 Dialog Action Notes
63. Scene 018 Panel 2 Dialog Action Notes
64. Scene 018 Panel 3 Dialog DAISY Now every year... Action Notes
65. Scene 018 Panel 4 Dialog DAISY Now every year... Action Notes
66. Scene 018 Panel 5 Dialog DAISY Now every year... Action Notes
67. Scene 018 Panel 6 Dialog DAISY Now every year... Action Notes
68. Scene 018 Panel 7 Dialog DAISY on Halloween... Action Notes
69. Scene 018 Panel 8 Dialog DAISY ...night! Action Notes
70. Scene 019 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE Uhm.. Action Notes
71. Scene 019 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE Uhm.. Action Notes
72. Scene 019 Panel 3 Dialog MINNIE you can Action Notes
73. Scene 019 Panel 4 Dialog MINNIE hear its Action Notes
74. Scene 019 Panel 5 Dialog MINNIE hear its Action Notes
75. Scene 019 Panel 6 Dialog MINNIE howls... Action Notes
76. Scene 019 Panel 7 Dialog MINNIE echoing ... Action Notes
77. Scene 020 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE -through Action Notes
78. Scene 021 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE -the Action Notes
79. Scene 022 Panel 1 Dialog MINNIE --woods! Action Notes
80. Scene 022 Panel 2 Dialog MINNIE --woods! Action Notes
81. Scene 022 Panel 3 Dialog (O.S) GOOFY AWOOOOOOOOOO! Action Notes
82. Scene 022 Panel 4 Dialog (O.S) GOOFY AWOOOOOOOOOO! Action Notes
83. Scene 022 Panel 5 Dialog (O.S) GOOFY AWOOOOOOOOOO! Action Notes
84. Scene 023 Panel 1 Dialog (O.S) GOOFY AWOOOOOOOOOO! Action Notes
85. Scene 023 Panel 2 Dialog (O.S) GOOFY AWOOOOOOOOOO! Action Notes
86. Scene 023 Panel 3 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
87. Scene 023 Panel 4 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
88. Scene 023 Panel 5 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
89. Scene 023 Panel 6 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
90. Scene 023 Panel 7 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
91. Scene 023 Panel 8 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
92. Scene 024 Panel 1 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
93. Scene 024 Panel 2 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
94. Scene 024 Panel 3 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
95. Scene 024 Panel 4 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
96. Scene 024 Panel 5 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes
97. Scene 024 Panel 6 Dialog KIDS <SCREAM> Action Notes