The Shriving Place

Personal project. Ages 14+. Based on Chapter 3 of the novella "The Shriving Place" by Brian Patrick Edwards. Simon meets Mary at the local Church in town and quickly forms a bond with her. As innocent as she seems, a dark past seems to haunt her.

Transcript

1. Scene 4 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes One person remains on the pew DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 13/98
2. Scene 4 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes A man enters stage left DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 14/98
3. Scene 6 Duration 09:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to medium shot of MARY, finishing her prayers DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 15/98
4. Scene 6 Duration 09:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes A hand reaches out to her DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 16/98
5. Scene 6 Duration 09:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She takes notice of it DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 17/98
6. Scene 6 Duration 09:00 Panel 4 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She looks up to see its owner DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 18/98
7. Scene 6 Duration 09:00 Panel 5 Duration 05:00 Action Notes Pan up to SIMON, who holds a dust pan and broom DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 19/98
8. Scene 7 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to close up of SIMON's face, asking for MARY to join him in cleaning DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 20/98
9. Scene 8 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY looks back at the hand, hesitant DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 21/98
10. Scene 8 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She looks back up at SIMON and smiles DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 22/98
11. Scene 8 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She happily accepts his offer DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 23/98
12. Scene 9 Duration 04:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to the floor DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 24/98
13. Scene 9 Duration 04:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes A broom enters stage right DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 25/98
14. Scene 9 Duration 04:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes It sweeps across the floor, collecting dust DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 26/98
15. Scene 9 Duration 04:00 Panel 4 Duration 01:00 Action Notes It continues and exits stage left DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 27/98
16. Scene 10 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to SIMON on the floor, awaiting the dust that sweeps in his direction DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 28/98
17. Scene 10 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "So, what do you do?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 29/98
18. Scene 11 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "What do you mean? Like, for work?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 30/98
19. Scene 12 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON looks back up and snickers DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 31/98
20. Scene 12 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes He begins to stand DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 32/98
21. Scene 12 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes He stands up fully DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 33/98
22. Scene 13 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to POV shot from SIMON to MARY DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 34/98
23. Scene 13 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON enters stage right DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 35/98
24. Scene 13 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Yes, for work. What does the lovely Mary do everyday?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 36/98
25. Scene 14 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Aaah, haha." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 37/98
26. Scene 14 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I... I work for a daycare." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 38/98
27. Scene 15 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Oh? You like kids?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 39/98
28. Scene 16 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to a medium wide shot of the pair looking back at each other DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 40/98
29. Scene 16 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Of course." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 41/98
30. Scene 16 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Does that not wear you out?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 42/98
31. Scene 17 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to POV shot from SIMON to MARY DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 43/98
32. Scene 17 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Depends on how good the help is. Some of the women can be pretty useless" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 44/98
33. Scene 18 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to medium wide shot of SIMON DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 45/98
34. Scene 18 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Am I good help?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 46/98
35. Scene 19 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY processes the question she has been asked. DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 47/98
36. Scene 19 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She laughs DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 48/98
37. Scene 19 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Yes, much better help than some of those women." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 49/98
38. Scene 20 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to an upshot of the altar and part of the crucifix DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 50/98
39. Scene 20 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY enters stage right DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 51/98
40. Scene 21 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Downshot of MARY, looking up in awe DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 52/98
41. Scene 21 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON enters from the top DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 53/98
42. Scene 21 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes He, too, gazes at what is in front of him DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 54/98
43. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON thinks for a second as he looks up DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 55/98
44. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "And what do you do when you're not working or praying?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 56/98
45. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 3 Duration 03:00 Action Notes Camera pans slowly to MARY DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 57/98
46. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 4 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I guess I do a whole lot of nothing." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 58/98
47. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 5 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I work nine hours, go home, read maybe, watch TV, talk to friends online..." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 59/98
48. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 6 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I don't know." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 60/98
49. Scene 22 Duration 09:00 Panel 7 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Not much, really, now that I think about it." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 61/98
50. Scene 23 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON stares back, surprised DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 62/98
51. Scene 23 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Girl, we need to get you out of the house!" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 63/98
52. Scene 24 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Why?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 64/98
53. Scene 25 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Life is more than working and praying" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 65/98
54. Scene 26 Duration 05:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY snickers lightly in response DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 66/98
55. Scene 26 Duration 05:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Well, working and praying is the easiest way to live a saintly life." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 67/98
56. Scene 26 Duration 05:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "It cuts out all the sin" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 68/98
57. Scene 26 Duration 05:00 Panel 4 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Hehe, I try my best, but I'm not perfect" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 69/98
58. Scene 26 Duration 05:00 Panel 5 Duration 01:00 Dialog THE PRIEST, off camera: "Pretty darn close!" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 70/98
59. Scene 27 Duration 05:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes THE PRIEST enters stage right DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 71/98
60. Scene 27 Duration 05:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog THE PRIEST: "Oh, you know I hear all sorts of things in Confessionals." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 72/98
61. Scene 27 Duration 05:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog THE PRIEST: "Horrible, horrible things every week" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 73/98
62. Scene 27 Duration 05:00 Panel 4 Duration 01:00 Dialog THE PRIEST: "Compared to them, I'd say you are almost like our Mother Mary." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 74/98
63. Scene 27 Duration 05:00 Panel 5 Duration 01:00 Dialog THE PRIEST: "Mary, almost full of grace" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 75/98
64. Scene 28 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY seems touched by the Father's words DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 76/98
65. Scene 28 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 02:00 Action Notes Yet still, she is disturbed by something in the back of her mind DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 77/98
66. Scene 29 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 02:00 Action Notes Cross dissolve to the exterior setting, in front of the entry door DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 78/98
67. Scene 30 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Cut to a medium wide shot, where the two stand side by side DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 79/98
68. Scene 30 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I've got to get going" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 80/98
69. Scene 31 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Oh, ok." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 81/98
70. Scene 31 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Where has the time gone?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 82/98
71. Scene 32 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "That's how it goes" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 83/98
72. Scene 32 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "Thanks for helping today" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 84/98
73. Scene 32 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "We don't always need to clean so much, just once a month will do." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 85/98
74. Scene 33 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "Well, would you like to get dinner?" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 86/98
75. Scene 33 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog SIMON: "My stomach's been growling for the past hour" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 87/98
76. Scene 34 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY chuckles lightly DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 88/98
77. Scene 34 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I know. I've heard." DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 89/98
78. Scene 35 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "But I can't" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 90/98
79. Scene 35 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Dialog MARY: "I've got some things to get back to at home" DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 91/98
80. Scene 35 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY exits stage right DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 92/98
81. Scene 36 Duration 03:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY continues walking to her car DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 93/98
82. Scene 36 Duration 03:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes She exits stage right. SIMON stares back, worried and a little disappointed DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 94/98
83. Scene 36 Duration 03:00 Panel 3 Duration 01:00 Action Notes MARY is off screen, leaving SIMON alone. DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 95/98
84. Scene 37 Duration 02:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes Est. shot of the Church parking lot at night DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 96/98
85. Scene 37 Duration 02:00 Panel 2 Duration 01:00 Action Notes SIMON and MARY walk towards their cars DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 97/98
86. Scene 38 Duration 01:00 Panel 1 Duration 01:00 Action Notes END. DanicaDiamos TheShrivingPlace Original Page 98/98